Computer [Draft 1]
Computer plays an important role in our daily life. It can help students hand in the homeworks quickly, and helps people transfer the information in time. As long as you turn on the computer, you must fall in love with it. However, be sure to remind yourself, do not sit in front of the computer too much time. Most parents do not like children to depend on the computer so much. Especially, the discuss on the bulletin board is the thing which waste a lot of time.
posted by Ryuka(暐) at 8:43 PM
6 Comments:
Computer沒加a
the discuss 是discussion
1.and "help" people transfer the information in time.
2.the "discussion" on the bulletin board is the thing which "wastes" a lot of time.
1.Computer plays an important role in our daily life沒有動詞
2.However, be sure to remind yourself, do not sit in front of the computer too much time. 那個do not前面應該是句號
3.Most parents do not like children to depend on the computer so much. 應該是don't lke their children還有那個to 不要用比較好，用that too depend on the computer
4.Especially, the discuss on the bulletin board is the thing which waste a lot of time.
應該是discussion
computer 前面可以加個The
too much time 我覺得for a long time比較好
1..homeworks->homework不用加s
2..and helps people transfer the information in time->help不用加s，因為前面有can
It can help students hand in the homeworks quickly, and "helps" ...不用加s
the "discuss" ->discussion
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