Friday, October 05, 2007

A Day I'll Never Forget [draft1]

I'll never forget the day a year ago. It was a cloudy day that my friend Alice and I took pictures in the park. We had a good time this afternoon. When we approached an old building near the park, some strange things happened. Alice intensely shivered without expection. I was shock and tried to smooth her, but she shivered mote serious. To made matter worse, it was out of her control. Furthermore, she talked to herself with hoarse voice. I tried to understand what she said but in vain. Suddenly, sky turned dim, sending a chill down my spine. Although I really so scared I still managed to take her to the nearest temple. The abbot in that temple said Alice had a mysterious ability which urged her to touch the unknown world. To be brief, she was threatened by the ghost! The abbot took the ghost away from Alice's body, after that, she recovered from shivering. Alice and I thanked to the abbot; moreover, Alice was extremely surprised at her marvelous body. It was really a special day. It bet I'll keep it in my mind forever.

5 Comments:

Blogger FawnYma said...

1.I'll never forget the day "that happened" a year ago.
2.without "expectation"
3. I was "shocked" and tried to "soothe" her
4.Although I "was" so scared
妳沒有be 動詞
5. "I" bet I'll keep it in my mind forever.

6:17 AM  
Blogger 許雅婷 said...

1.without expection是expectation
2.shock要加ed

9:45 AM  
Blogger Samantha*霓∥ said...

Although I really so scared I>>加really好奇怪,應該是I was so scared就好了芭

你有進步呢!!這次很多學過的東西
好棒XD

9:00 AM  
Blogger Celia said...

I was "shock" and tried to smooth her, but she shivered mote serious. To made matter worse, it was out of her control. 應該是shocked.

11:09 PM  
Blogger Tina said...

I was "shock"
expectation(n.)期待.期望
was "shocked"

6:20 AM  

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