Autobiography-2 [Draft 1]
In the junior high school, I was the class leader. It made me know many things related to communicate and be a efficient people. I learned a lot from it. After graduated from junior high school, I studied in National Tainan Commercial Vocational Senior High School, and I chose the Department of Applied Foreign Language. Although I majored in English, study it well is still a difficult thing to me, but I worked hard to make my English progress. Besides English, I am also interested in Japanese, and I learned it by myself. When I met the questions on studying, I will ask my classmates or teachers. I wish I can do it better than better.
Getting into a good technical university is many student's wish, so am I. I wish I can achieve this goal in the future, and then I can meet a lot of different people、get more and more knowledge and start my new life. I will do my best for this goal.
Getting into a good technical university is many student's wish, so am I. I wish I can achieve this goal in the future, and then I can meet a lot of different people、get more and more knowledge and start my new life. I will do my best for this goal.
posted by Ryuka(暐) at 8:15 PM
6 Comments:
1.I studied in National Tainan Commercial Vocational Senior High School,我覺得要用現在式
2.study it well is still a difficult thing to me應該是studying
3.although跟but不能連用
1.be "an" efficient people
2."studying" it well is still a difficult thing to me
make my English "progress"
progress是名詞喔！妳可以說become better
3.When I "had" the questions on studying
I can meet a lot of different people "," get more and more knowledge 大嬸啊，都什麼時候了妳還在用頓號。
4.我覺得妳可以在高中的地方用現在式
and be a efficient people>>a改an
Getting into a good technical university is many student's>>students'
1.and be a efficient people應該要用person
2.Although I majored in English,那個major我覺得用現在式就好了
3.study it well is still a difficult thing to me那個study用ing要不然有兩個動詞
4. but I worked hard to make my English progress這句前面我覺得可以用句點，然後首字大寫
5.many student's wish那個要用students'
6.get more and more knowledge and start my new life那個可以用getting
1..be "a" efficient "people"->an;person
2..I wish I can do it better than better->wish要不改成hope比較好
wish是比較不可能實現的，hope比較有可能會實現...
related to "communicate"->communication我覺得比較好ㄟ
"an" efficient "person"
"studying" it well is still
I "am" also interested in Japanese, and I "learn" it by myself.
When I met the questions on studying, I "will" ask->可以不用加
I wish I "could" do
Getting into a good technical university is many student's "wishes","and" so am I.
I wish I "could" achieve this..
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