The Computers [Draft 1]
Computers are playing an important role in our daily life. They have been most popularly for everyone around the world. We use they to create many benefit. For example, computers are convenient for us, we can use they to shopping, search the information and download a lot of things. Moreover, they can communication people who live in different country by e-mail or message. The most interesting thing is computers have entertainment. If you feel boring or on your leisure time, you can play on-line games on computers and computers also can let you surround the books, music even the hot movies.
Personally, I have a liking for computers. I have three reasons. First, computers can connect my friends and I. We can chat on the internet even we are stay in different country. Second, computers let my daily life more easily. I always buy the books or CDs by computer. It is so convenient that can save much time. After all, I can find a mass of various information on the internet. It put my life full of surprise. Therefore, computers are so essential for me, that I can not image the day we without computers.
Personally, I have a liking for computers. I have three reasons. First, computers can connect my friends and I. We can chat on the internet even we are stay in different country. Second, computers let my daily life more easily. I always buy the books or CDs by computer. It is so convenient that can save much time. After all, I can find a mass of various information on the internet. It put my life full of surprise. Therefore, computers are so essential for me, that I can not image the day we without computers.
posted by Ryuka(暐) at 8:17 PM
6 Comments:
1.We use "them" to create many "benefits". 受詞
2.we can use "them" to shopping,
3. "we" can "communicate" "with" people who live in different "countries" by e-mail or message 動詞是communicate
4. If you feel "bored" on your leisure time
5.even "when" we stay in different country. stay是動詞
6.Second, computers let my daily life "be" more easily. 我覺得好像要加be(不確定)，因為let it be
7.I always buy the books or CDs "on" computer.
8.computers are so essential for me that I can not "imagine" the day we "live" without computers.
小姐啊！image 和imagine 差很多
1.We use they to create 應該是them
2.they can communication people 應該是communicate
3.we are stay in different country.應該用stay
１．They have been most popularly for everyone around the world.那個popular應該是當形容詞不用ly
2.We use they to create many benefit.很明顯的錯誤你應該是打錯字吧
３． we can use they to shopping,那個shopping是名詞，要不然我覺得可以用do shopping
4.they can communication people who live in different country by e-mail or message那個communication是名詞，而且這樣語意整個不順，我覺得可以用people who live in different countrys communicate by e-mail or message
5.It is so convenient that can save much time.那個that 後面要加句子
６．應該是時間太少了吧，不過還是要檢查一下再上傳
computers are convenient for us, we can use >>for us 後面好像要斷句
I can find a mass of various information>>mass和various應該選一個用就好了
1..popularly->popular
2..they->them
3..we can use they 'to' shopping,"and" search the information and download a lot of things->do(and 是我覺得加會比較順!)
4..communication->communicate with
"popular"
We use "them"
many benefit"s"
use they to "go/do" shopping
communication->communicate
different "countries"
feel "bored"
we "are" "stay" in different country
->動詞v.s be動詞
we "live"
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